Saturday, February 7, 2009

One Single Impression: (movement) Summer's Breeze

Summer’s breeze
Curtains billow
Toes wiggle
Minds wander
Bodies meld
Souls cleave
Curtains billow
Summer’s breeze

13 comments:

Deborah Godin said...

Love how you looped this one around. Very vivid!

gautami tripathy said...

I agree! Very vivid indeed!

movement

Fledgling Poet said...

You made me ache for summer! Such beautiful and vivid imagery.

Pam said...

Love the circular nature of this poem. It makes it impossible to pause and stop the movement.

SandyCarlson said...

I sure do like that very beautiful movement.

The word "breeze" is full of easy summer peace. Thanks for reminding me!

Great stuff, Laurie.

floreta said...

i like the ordering of your words and the way this flows

kitehorse said...

i like the cleave is a self-contradicting word:

stick together
cut apart

Roswila said...

Intriguing! With my penchant for writing dream poetry, I read this as being about an ultimately sad dream on a summer's evening...taking "cleave" in it's "cut apart" meaning. When I read it in it's "stick together" meaning I read the poem to be about a very sensual experience. I really enjoy ambiguity. :-)

Beth P. said...

ahhhh!
that lovely feeling of timelessness, motionlessness!

They don't last that long, though...but wonderful to remember.

Thanks, Laurie!

Tumblewords: said...

Great movement and flow in this piece! Love it....

one more believer said...

perfect moments of movement

Regina Marie said...

I bet there are an awful lot of folks longing for summer right now! Very nice poem with sunshine-

gel(Emerald Eyes) said...

Enjoyed reading these warm weather verbs-
descriptive and playful!I hope it took some of the chill off of your snowy times!