Summer’s breeze
Curtains billow
Toes wiggle
Minds wander
Bodies meld
Souls cleave
Curtains billow
Summer’s breeze
Curtains billow
Toes wiggle
Minds wander
Bodies meld
Souls cleave
Curtains billow
Summer’s breeze
Rancho Santa Ana Botanical Gardens
13 years ago
13 comments:
Love how you looped this one around. Very vivid!
I agree! Very vivid indeed!
movement
You made me ache for summer! Such beautiful and vivid imagery.
Love the circular nature of this poem. It makes it impossible to pause and stop the movement.
I sure do like that very beautiful movement.
The word "breeze" is full of easy summer peace. Thanks for reminding me!
Great stuff, Laurie.
i like the ordering of your words and the way this flows
i like the cleave is a self-contradicting word:
stick together
cut apart
Intriguing! With my penchant for writing dream poetry, I read this as being about an ultimately sad dream on a summer's evening...taking "cleave" in it's "cut apart" meaning. When I read it in it's "stick together" meaning I read the poem to be about a very sensual experience. I really enjoy ambiguity. :-)
ahhhh!
that lovely feeling of timelessness, motionlessness!
They don't last that long, though...but wonderful to remember.
Thanks, Laurie!
Great movement and flow in this piece! Love it....
perfect moments of movement
I bet there are an awful lot of folks longing for summer right now! Very nice poem with sunshine-
Enjoyed reading these warm weather verbs-
descriptive and playful!I hope it took some of the chill off of your snowy times!
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